And the afterword. Someone might want to look over this one. I'm not too sure on the fourth and fifth paragraphs.
So, what did you think?
It's how it usually is, but it's difficult to make it hit home like I thought. There are several places in the story where I cut some details out, but I mostly feel, well, it's okay not to mind it all that much, isn't it? So there's no problem. (Boom)
Also, about supplying the ingredients, I wanted to do more content that you can sink your teeth into and have many things happen...but while I considered it, it would have gotten too long, so I cut it down to just this. (Boom)
Keeping it short while collecting all the important parts...is hard.
As I said in the foreword, that it seems hard to get a hand on some chocolate... but with Yukari-sama's help, it'll be killing two birds with one stone!
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